Zack, what a fabulous entry to 100WC.
Firstly you are a superb writing and I hope you continue! You have varied your use of sentence openers, used powerful and ambitious vocabulary, as well as devising a unique and gripping plot!
I look forward to reading future entries Zack! Keep up the hard work!
Mrs Goulbourne, Team 100WC, Liverpool, UK
Barbara McFall (Team 100WC) The Phoenix School, MA USA says:
Hello Zack,
What an engaging piece of writing. You have used descriptive language and excellent vocabulary to truly paint a picture of the action in your readers’ minds. From the very beginning with your….”canopy of the ancient, rotten trees towered over me like a dracula slowly, but stealthily stalking me.” I also liked the image of the main character crackling leaves beneath his feet. The ending also allows your readers to engage by using their imagination…..what might happen next? That is the question your readers can ponder.
Great job!
Barbara McFall (Team 100WC)
Teacher at The Phoenix School, Salem, MA USA
Zack, what a fabulous entry to 100WC.
Firstly you are a superb writing and I hope you continue! You have varied your use of sentence openers, used powerful and ambitious vocabulary, as well as devising a unique and gripping plot!
I look forward to reading future entries Zack! Keep up the hard work!
Mrs Goulbourne, Team 100WC, Liverpool, UK
Hello Zack,
What an engaging piece of writing. You have used descriptive language and excellent vocabulary to truly paint a picture of the action in your readers’ minds. From the very beginning with your….”canopy of the ancient, rotten trees towered over me like a dracula slowly, but stealthily stalking me.” I also liked the image of the main character crackling leaves beneath his feet. The ending also allows your readers to engage by using their imagination…..what might happen next? That is the question your readers can ponder.
Great job!
Barbara McFall (Team 100WC)
Teacher at The Phoenix School, Salem, MA USA