I really like yours,you have put what you can hear and see.
I wonder what that thing in the red cloak was? Take care with your spacing before and after commas. I like your use of direct speech. Some more description would help build a picture in your reader’s mind.
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I really like yours,you have put what you can hear and see.
I wonder what that thing in the red cloak was? Take care with your spacing before and after commas. I like your use of direct speech. Some more description would help build a picture in your reader’s mind.