Hi Casper! I liked your tense but strange story. It was very interesting. Next time you could try and keep the tenseness of your story because you had your story very tense until you wrote ‘weirdly, I woke up in an old, rotten cottage made of wood.’. You could try and make it a bit more descriptive because you didn’t explain what the wood was and what didn’t let you cover your ears.
Thanks Casper- you have opened effectively using interesting adverbs to add precision. Do think about varying sentence starters more often- I is used a little too much?
Hi Casper! I liked your tense but strange story. It was very interesting. Next time you could try and keep the tenseness of your story because you had your story very tense until you wrote ‘weirdly, I woke up in an old, rotten cottage made of wood.’. You could try and make it a bit more descriptive because you didn’t explain what the wood was and what didn’t let you cover your ears.
Maddie
Thanks Casper- you have opened effectively using interesting adverbs to add precision. Do think about varying sentence starters more often- I is used a little too much?