You have used some fantastic ideas here. I like the idea of your custard coming to life because of a special spice that your grandma had used. That was really original! You’ve used some great description to give me a picture of what the monster was like and the way you included speech helped to move the story along. You’ve done a very good job on this piece of writing. Well done! There are a couple of spelling errors, but they are the tricky words and you have used your sounds to work them out. Keep up the good work Jessie!
Hi Jessica,
I like it how the grandma loved cabbage soup. I like how you wrote cabbage custard monster. Can you please check your spelling apart from that AMAZING!!!!!!
Hi Jessie,
You have used some fantastic ideas here. I like the idea of your custard coming to life because of a special spice that your grandma had used. That was really original! You’ve used some great description to give me a picture of what the monster was like and the way you included speech helped to move the story along. You’ve done a very good job on this piece of writing. Well done! There are a couple of spelling errors, but they are the tricky words and you have used your sounds to work them out. Keep up the good work Jessie!
Mrs McGuiness (Team 100WC)
Derbyshire, England
Hi Jessica,
I like it how the grandma loved cabbage soup. I like how you wrote cabbage custard monster. Can you please check your spelling apart from that AMAZING!!!!!!