The rickety old bridge

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2 Responses to The rickety old bridge

  1. Tom says:

    Good work Charlotte.
    – I liked how you used paragraphs.
    – I liked the way you used adjectives.
    – I liked the way the spellings were correct.
    – Try to use a simile next time.

  2. Mabel says:

    Wow Charlotte! I love this blog.You have used onomatopoea and a rhetorical question!
    You can also vary your scentince lengths and one time you used a fraction!!!
    Next time maybe you could use a subordinate clause?
    All the same this is a truly fantastic blog.
    Well done!!!☺

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