oooh! full of suspense Niamh! I feel rooted to the spot with you and equally unsure of what your next move should be. Good writing, just mind the odd spelling mistake.
Hi Niamh,
I love that you have used so many adjectives and checked your work. My favourite bit was were you said ‘As I climbed the rocks leading to the bridge I had a wave of fear run over me’.
The only thing I would add in is a rhetorical question.
But overall Well Done!
Wow Niamh, I really like your blog! You have used so many exiting adjectives and made it really exiting!I especially like your description, “The bridge creaked dangerously under me, then a genie appeared.
Maybe you could add some speech?
Well done!!
ok but needs to explain more as it sort of jumps straight to it. But overall not bad
oooh! full of suspense Niamh! I feel rooted to the spot with you and equally unsure of what your next move should be. Good writing, just mind the odd spelling mistake.
What a tricky choice you face, Niamh. I wouldn’t like to be in your spot!
Hi Niamh,
I love that you have used so many adjectives and checked your work. My favourite bit was were you said ‘As I climbed the rocks leading to the bridge I had a wave of fear run over me’.
The only thing I would add in is a rhetorical question.
But overall Well Done!
Interesting Niamh I like how you put emotion into it . You should put more description.
Wow Niamh, I really like your blog! You have used so many exiting adjectives and made it really exiting!I especially like your description, “The bridge creaked dangerously under me, then a genie appeared.
Maybe you could add some speech?
Well done!!