Hi Bert,
I thought your story was really good but you forgot quite a lot of full stops. I loved the description ‘large polished Oak double doors’but it does need commas. Apart from those few tweaks I thought it was brilliant and deserves to be on our blog.
Hi Bert,
I thought your 100word challenge was very good with lots of description like; the large polished oak double doors.
However you forgot to put in quite a lot of commas and full stops and also you put some capital letters in when you didn’t need to like; the large polished Oak double… so you didn’t need to have a capital letter on Oak.
Hi Bert – we really liked the description that you used in your story! You could make it even better by thinking about when you use full stops!
From Harry & Klaudiuz 🙂
Hi Bert,
I thought your story was really good but you forgot quite a lot of full stops. I loved the description ‘large polished Oak double doors’but it does need commas. Apart from those few tweaks I thought it was brilliant and deserves to be on our blog.
Hi Bert,
I thought your 100word challenge was very good with lots of description like; the large polished oak double doors.
However you forgot to put in quite a lot of commas and full stops and also you put some capital letters in when you didn’t need to like; the large polished Oak double… so you didn’t need to have a capital letter on Oak.
Hi Bert – we really liked the description that you used in your story! You could make it even better by thinking about when you use full stops!
From Harry & Klaudiuz 🙂
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