Well done Arun. This sounds like a great day out! You are describing how you felt particularly well (over whelmed and shocked) and you are using capital letters correctly.
– I would like you to add more detail to your work. Could you have added more to each paragraph to describe what you could see, hear and smell? This would help to build up the bigger picture and to create more of an atmosphere.
Well done Arun. This sounds like a great day out! You are describing how you felt particularly well (over whelmed and shocked) and you are using capital letters correctly.
– I would like you to add more detail to your work. Could you have added more to each paragraph to describe what you could see, hear and smell? This would help to build up the bigger picture and to create more of an atmosphere.