Fantastic blog Matilda. You have really described the arrival of your cat in great detail and you have created a great picture for the reader. I am also incredibly impressed that you have worked hard to try and vary your punctuation. You have been able to use full stops, brackets and exclamation marks which is excellent. It is clear that you have also checked and edited your work.
– To keep aiming to use exciting adjectives and even similes in your work.
Amazing Matilda!
You have included lots and lots of adjectives in your peace of blog, also described a lot about how your cat was acting when she first came to your flat.
-next time maybe you could write about how you were feeling when your cat (Fudgie) was hiding behind the sofa, and how you were feeling when Fudgie was starting to be more confident and get out from behind the sofa.
Amazing Matilda!
I am really glad you added lots and lots of adjectives, and described lots about your cat how she looks like.
-maybe you could of added how you were feeling when your cat ( Fudgie ) was behind the sofa all the time.
Fantastic blog Matilda. You have really described the arrival of your cat in great detail and you have created a great picture for the reader. I am also incredibly impressed that you have worked hard to try and vary your punctuation. You have been able to use full stops, brackets and exclamation marks which is excellent. It is clear that you have also checked and edited your work.
– To keep aiming to use exciting adjectives and even similes in your work.
Amazing Matilda!
You have included lots and lots of adjectives in your peace of blog, also described a lot about how your cat was acting when she first came to your flat.
-next time maybe you could write about how you were feeling when your cat (Fudgie) was hiding behind the sofa, and how you were feeling when Fudgie was starting to be more confident and get out from behind the sofa.
Amazing Matilda!
I am really glad you added lots and lots of adjectives, and described lots about your cat how she looks like.
-maybe you could of added how you were feeling when your cat ( Fudgie ) was behind the sofa all the time.
A fantastic piece of writing! Great punctuation! Well done