hi Laney!
Your penguin poem is really touching me with the I was at the zoo and we saw penguins under the water.
I really like how you were referring to the poem!
Just check your punctuation and maybe you could just add some figurative language.
I liked your use of vocabulary for example paddling swiftly in the ocean is a great phrase and I would magpie it! My question is why did you choose penguins as your subject.
I love how you used lots of adjectives and even adverbs too. I also like how you kept a beat to make it sound more coordinated. One thing you might be able to improve is that you could try to add in some interesting punctuation. but really it was amazing!
hi Laney!
Your penguin poem is really touching me with the I was at the zoo and we saw penguins under the water.
I really like how you were referring to the poem!
Just check your punctuation and maybe you could just add some figurative language.
I liked your use of vocabulary for example paddling swiftly in the ocean is a great phrase and I would magpie it! My question is why did you choose penguins as your subject.
Well done! This is a great blog.
I love how you used lots of adjectives and even adverbs too. I also like how you kept a beat to make it sound more coordinated. One thing you might be able to improve is that you could try to add in some interesting punctuation. but really it was amazing!