Wow, you have ended with a great cliff hanger. I wonder what will happen next.
Well done for using speech in your writing. Remember to check your work before publishing it- I can see a sentence that doesn’t start with a capital letter. Can you see it?
I’m looking forward to reading the continuation 🙂
I really liked your story because of your great description especially the part when you wrote the ‘statue advanced towards them’.Also I liked the way they said in unison “intruders intruders”.
The dialogue at the beginning is very convincing and really draws the reader into the story. You’ve written this in an exciting style, which makes me want to find out what happens next!
Wow, you have ended with a great cliff hanger. I wonder what will happen next.
Well done for using speech in your writing. Remember to check your work before publishing it- I can see a sentence that doesn’t start with a capital letter. Can you see it?
I’m looking forward to reading the continuation 🙂
I really liked your story because of your great description especially the part when you wrote the ‘statue advanced towards them’.Also I liked the way they said in unison “intruders intruders”.
The dialogue at the beginning is very convincing and really draws the reader into the story. You’ve written this in an exciting style, which makes me want to find out what happens next!
wow thats such a tensed cliffhanger. can’t wait till chapter 2!