Hi Joshua! I liked your piece about the haunted house and who will approach it next.
Next Time: Before you publish it you could edit and improve your writing. I’m saying this because whilst I was reading it I realised that you accidentally missed out some punctuation and that you didn’t really understand how to use “speech marks”. In class you could go and tell Ms. Cohen to help you understand.
I like the piece were you described the haunted house. But maybe introduce the characters first, instead of just names. To give the reader a base of what they look like .
Hi Joshua! I liked your piece about the haunted house and who will approach it next.
Next Time: Before you publish it you could edit and improve your writing. I’m saying this because whilst I was reading it I realised that you accidentally missed out some punctuation and that you didn’t really understand how to use “speech marks”. In class you could go and tell Ms. Cohen to help you understand.
I hope this advice helps you!
Maddie
Hi Joshua,
I like the piece were you described the haunted house. But maybe introduce the characters first, instead of just names. To give the reader a base of what they look like .
Hope this helps you on your next piece.