Rafi I loved your piece on hurricanes, and am quite glad I don’t live in Enilorac…. Your descriptive writing captured the power of the hurricane extremely well, I’m not sure I could fall asleep during all that!
Great adjectives, I liked it when you used the simile about Haiti. I can really imagine the terrible scene in my head. Maybe you could use connectives and adverbs more. But your writing is excellent. As your writing is amazing, does any author inspire you? Well done.
Good use of conectives and adjectives .Mabey use some more metaphores in your next piece
Good description . It made me feel like I was in a real hurricane.
Rafi I loved your piece on hurricanes, and am quite glad I don’t live in Enilorac…. Your descriptive writing captured the power of the hurricane extremely well, I’m not sure I could fall asleep during all that!
Great adjectives, I liked it when you used the simile about Haiti. I can really imagine the terrible scene in my head. Maybe you could use connectives and adverbs more. But your writing is excellent. As your writing is amazing, does any author inspire you? Well done.
(Evie’s younger brother Jacob)