Hi Anna,
Like your flower story this also met the requirements. I loved the way you decribed the fish with all those wonderful adjectives. For about the one millionth time, keep up the good work!
From Rafi’s Mum.
Hello Anna.W,
Fabulous work as always. The description was incredible and the way you ended it with the last sentence painted a vivid picture in my mind. I thought maybe you could have split it into two paragraphs but apart from that everything was perfect and brilliant.
From Rafi’s Dad.
I love the description of the fish as a ‘wave’. The ocean standing still makes one quite worried about what will happen next. A wonderful piece of work.
Hi, you’ve used lots of great descriptive words. I like the idea of the fish wearing cloaks of pink and blue. The ONLY bad thing is that you wrote 2new” instead of “knew”. Anyway, this is a superb piece of writing which I really enjoyed reading. 😉
Wow Anna you’ve got some amazing adjectives
and I loved the part when you said tinted with silver.
I love the image of the fish wearing cloaks of pink and blue!
Hi Anna,
Like your flower story this also met the requirements. I loved the way you decribed the fish with all those wonderful adjectives. For about the one millionth time, keep up the good work!
From Rafi’s Mum.
Hello Anna.W,
Fabulous work as always. The description was incredible and the way you ended it with the last sentence painted a vivid picture in my mind. I thought maybe you could have split it into two paragraphs but apart from that everything was perfect and brilliant.
From Rafi’s Dad.
I love the description of the fish as a ‘wave’. The ocean standing still makes one quite worried about what will happen next. A wonderful piece of work.
Good work Anna you had some lovely adjectives.I love the bit wear you said “everyone of the fish wore a cloak of pink and blue.”
Hi, you’ve used lots of great descriptive words. I like the idea of the fish wearing cloaks of pink and blue. The ONLY bad thing is that you wrote 2new” instead of “knew”. Anyway, this is a superb piece of writing which I really enjoyed reading. 😉
Good story. I like your use of description
The description was so real I am feeling sea sick! Keep on writing…
WOWZERS!! Anna this piece of work is great I love the way you described the fish!
Great discription and brill adjectives. You would make it as a fine author one day!