Woah, that was incredible! How did you come up with such an amazing story like that. I loved all the similes and metaphirs you used so keep up the good work!
From Rafi.
Hello Louis,
You work was very good especially all the description. The connectives, adverbs, similes and metaphors you used were all very good. Overall your work deserves to be put up on the blog.
From Rafi’s Mum.
Louis, this is very impressive! Your vocabulary rivals some of my friends, and they’re twice your age! The vivid description of the colours and textures around are also fantastic, your use of metaphors is also great. Keep it up.
This is great writing Louis, really exciting and with excellent description. I enjoyed reading it and hope you will continue the story, for all of us commentators to enjoy further. Mum
Very good. I like that it used a lot of expression, and even I could not understand the words because they were so exotic! Every time you write, it fills me with what seems to be wonder, of how you can write such imaginative things.
I wish that one day I could write just like you, Louis, and share your intelligence for writing on blogs.
Flew up in flames… I like it! 🙂
great description,and lots of action.
I like how you used the description at the start when you wrote the ground shimmering beneath me.
Woah, that was incredible! How did you come up with such an amazing story like that. I loved all the similes and metaphirs you used so keep up the good work!
From Rafi.
Hello Louis,
You work was very good especially all the description. The connectives, adverbs, similes and metaphors you used were all very good. Overall your work deserves to be put up on the blog.
From Rafi’s Mum.
Wow Louis that is great, you obviously read a lot to be able to write so well. Really descriptive language… excellent xx
Louis, this is very impressive! Your vocabulary rivals some of my friends, and they’re twice your age! The vivid description of the colours and textures around are also fantastic, your use of metaphors is also great. Keep it up.
Louis
I love your descriptive phrases it really captured the tension of the moment. I thought the saucepan on a stove was a great way to describe it.
What a remarkable story! I’m looking forward to seeing it all.
Brilliant-you should be ghost writing for me. Help please!
Beautifully written and very evocative.Well done.
I am so proud of you. I would love to be able to write as well as you. Your challenge is to start writing in French. Papa
This is great writing Louis, really exciting and with excellent description. I enjoyed reading it and hope you will continue the story, for all of us commentators to enjoy further. Mum
Very good. I like that it used a lot of expression, and even I could not understand the words because they were so exotic! Every time you write, it fills me with what seems to be wonder, of how you can write such imaginative things.
I wish that one day I could write just like you, Louis, and share your intelligence for writing on blogs.