Very well done Ella, I liked it all the way through. Here are some things I really liked:
1. When you used the three examples of smells
2. The story line when you explained that you had not seen the mysterious room before
3. Muttered is a good word for said
Your work is brilliant but here are some improvements you could make:
1. You could describe the room
2. Write more! I want to find out what happens next!
As your writing is good, do you have an author that inspires you to write like that?
Very well done Ella, I liked it all the way through. Here are some things I really liked:
1. When you used the three examples of smells
2. The story line when you explained that you had not seen the mysterious room before
3. Muttered is a good word for said
Your work is brilliant but here are some improvements you could make:
1. You could describe the room
2. Write more! I want to find out what happens next!
As your writing is good, do you have an author that inspires you to write like that?