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  1. Jonathan - Anna S's uncle says:

    I think I could cope with the parrots, but not the spider! If it’s bigger than a 5p piece it has to be picked up in a glass. Arachnophobia!

  2. Boaz (Rafi's Brother) says:

    Hello Alfie,
    Your work was very good and I loved the way you described the tarantula. remember not to put description all in one go. Good work.
    From Rafi’s Brother.

  3. Chloe (Rafi's Cousin) says:

    Alfie.W, your work was amazing. The description really planted an image in my head! Keep up the good work.
    From Rafi’s Cousin.

  4. Noah (Rafi's Cousin) says:

    Hi Alfie.w,
    your work was good. you could have used more connectives but otherwise it was up to standards and the criteria.
    From Rafi’s younger Cousin.

  5. Rafi says:

    Hello Alfie Williams,
    I thought your work was very good and had a lot of description/adjectives. You could have more adverbs and connectives but they are quite hard to use so don’t worry. keep up the good work.
    From Rafi.

  6. Freya says:

    I loved the description of the tarantula but maybe you could think of another word apart from it although it probably wasan intresting visit to the zoo!

  7. Harry says:

    I like your punchuation such as excemation marks however you could inproove on your adgectives

  8. Raphael says:

    Hi Alfie I love the description of the taranturla it’s great but remember to go back and correct the puntuation.
    Raphael

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