Hello Alfie,
Your work was very good and I loved the way you described the tarantula. remember not to put description all in one go. Good work.
From Rafi’s Brother.
Hi Alfie.w,
your work was good. you could have used more connectives but otherwise it was up to standards and the criteria.
From Rafi’s younger Cousin.
Hello Alfie Williams,
I thought your work was very good and had a lot of description/adjectives. You could have more adverbs and connectives but they are quite hard to use so don’t worry. keep up the good work.
From Rafi.
I loved the description of the tarantula but maybe you could think of another word apart from it although it probably wasan intresting visit to the zoo!
I think I could cope with the parrots, but not the spider! If it’s bigger than a 5p piece it has to be picked up in a glass. Arachnophobia!
Hello Alfie,
Your work was very good and I loved the way you described the tarantula. remember not to put description all in one go. Good work.
From Rafi’s Brother.
Alfie.W, your work was amazing. The description really planted an image in my head! Keep up the good work.
From Rafi’s Cousin.
Hi Alfie.w,
your work was good. you could have used more connectives but otherwise it was up to standards and the criteria.
From Rafi’s younger Cousin.
Hello Alfie Williams,
I thought your work was very good and had a lot of description/adjectives. You could have more adverbs and connectives but they are quite hard to use so don’t worry. keep up the good work.
From Rafi.
I loved the description of the tarantula but maybe you could think of another word apart from it although it probably wasan intresting visit to the zoo!
I like your punchuation such as excemation marks however you could inproove on your adgectives
Hi Alfie I love the description of the taranturla it’s great but remember to go back and correct the puntuation.
Raphael