Hi Grace,
I like your use of words such as “crimson”. However, remember to check your work as you wrote din instead of did and of instead of off. You also change tenses a bit. Anyway, this is very good and I like the idea.
I really enjoyed reading this story because it had lots of good adjectives. To improve it I would re-check the story because some of it didn’t make sence like “Anna is cross _ Jamie because…” Overall I thought you had a really good 100 word challenge!
Hi Grace,
I like your use of words such as “crimson”. However, remember to check your work as you wrote din instead of did and of instead of off. You also change tenses a bit. Anyway, this is very good and I like the idea.
Thank you Jessica. I see exsactly where you mean. I changed tenses after the first paragraph.
I really enjoyed reading this story because it had lots of good adjectives. To improve it I would re-check the story because some of it didn’t make sence like “Anna is cross _ Jamie because…” Overall I thought you had a really good 100 word challenge!