Hi Rafi. I think this is one of your best posts and a good example of how useful this blog has been because you are clearly now writing with the reader in mind – trying to make your writing interesting and exciting, you have succeeded. The idea of meeting a vampire was nice and scary, and I like the idea of your mouth dropping open like an elevator! I wonder what happened next?
That was amazing!!! You used lots of discriptive languige which realy made the piece of writing stand out. It looks like you have a very imaganative mind!!
From Gabriella
Hi Rafi
This is a really great interpretation of this week’s 100WC prompt. I think your choice of title sets the scene for your reader and your imagery is very powerful. I love the metaphor of the mouth dropping like an elevator. Your ideas are also very good particularly the part about feeding on sorrow – I thought that was very inspired. Well done.
I really liked it because it had such powerful words like chirped and inquisitive and I liked it how you put a bit of stammering.
Hi Rafi. I think this is one of your best posts and a good example of how useful this blog has been because you are clearly now writing with the reader in mind – trying to make your writing interesting and exciting, you have succeeded. The idea of meeting a vampire was nice and scary, and I like the idea of your mouth dropping open like an elevator! I wonder what happened next?
That was amazing!!! You used lots of discriptive languige which realy made the piece of writing stand out. It looks like you have a very imaganative mind!!
From Gabriella
Hi Rafi
This is a really great interpretation of this week’s 100WC prompt. I think your choice of title sets the scene for your reader and your imagery is very powerful. I love the metaphor of the mouth dropping like an elevator. Your ideas are also very good particularly the part about feeding on sorrow – I thought that was very inspired. Well done.
Lord Loss I really like your 100wc It gives me a clear image in my head how the mesterious guy looks.
I really liked the story. It is a really strong story with the words you used.
I think that this is great! You should make a sequel.