George

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4 Responses to George

  1. Louis CB says:

    Great start! Your description was good, you spelt everything correctly, although you could have put in about ten commas as I could not take a breath. Otherwise, it was fabulistic! Be sure to check out my blog, or the world of Water.

  2. Alex C says:

    well done!! the only thing I can say is the I should be a capital letter but apart from that very good.

  3. Jake says:

    Good start… I agree with Louis CB, there should have been a few commas in there. I loved it, cant wait to read more from you!

  4. Liam says:

    Brilliant start !! Your spelling was alls good and
    So was your description but I agree Louis CB and
    Jake there should of been a few commas but
    Other wise it was fantastic.

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