Great peice Anna, you used some really good discription and awsome words like ‘franticly’ you were also very good at getting your tenses right because that can be very tricky when your talking in the present! To improve you could have put a space between ‘in’ and ‘the’. Well Done!
Amazing! I loved all of the decription. that was amazing. No improvements. What inspired you to write this? Have you been on holiday to a place like this?
Great peice Anna, you used some really good discription and awsome words like ‘franticly’ you were also very good at getting your tenses right because that can be very tricky when your talking in the present! To improve you could have put a space between ‘in’ and ‘the’. Well Done!
Amazing! I loved all of the decription. that was amazing. No improvements. What inspired you to write this? Have you been on holiday to a place like this?