Wow, I love the story plan, you really can make a good blog, what inspired you to write this? Has it happened to one of your family? the only bit to improve would be to put a space between ‘can’ and ‘you’.
This is a very intriguing story. In the pen- ultimate sentence you used an amazing word- dubiously! I never would have thought of it if I were to write this story. I couldn’t find any fault except for when you didn’t leave a space between ‘can’ and ‘you’. Also at the beginning I didn’t really understand the part before the brackets?! Keep up the blogging.
Wow, I love the story plan, you really can make a good blog, what inspired you to write this? Has it happened to one of your family? the only bit to improve would be to put a space between ‘can’ and ‘you’.
This is a very intriguing story. In the pen- ultimate sentence you used an amazing word- dubiously! I never would have thought of it if I were to write this story. I couldn’t find any fault except for when you didn’t leave a space between ‘can’ and ‘you’. Also at the beginning I didn’t really understand the part before the brackets?! Keep up the blogging.