Ryan, I really liked this. You have used great words such as “screeched” and used a realistic situation. I feel concerned for you and your mother. What happens next?
Really enjoyed reading your 100WC this week. I thought the way you used short, snappy sentences really grabbed my attention and made me want to read more.. Your use of descriptive language was also good and I could just imagine the red hot bouncing sausages, you made them sound as if they were real! Well done.
Ryan, I really liked this. You have used great words such as “screeched” and used a realistic situation. I feel concerned for you and your mother. What happens next?
Hi Ryan
Really enjoyed reading your 100WC this week. I thought the way you used short, snappy sentences really grabbed my attention and made me want to read more.. Your use of descriptive language was also good and I could just imagine the red hot bouncing sausages, you made them sound as if they were real! Well done.