Occasionally you forget full stops, but your writing sets a movie in my head it feels like it is happening right in front of me. But if the sun was shining brightly then the moon wouldn’t be out yet. Apart from them it is brilliant!
Zoe, this is a great 100 Word Challenge entry. Your first sentences set the scene for the story perfectly, I can just imagine the children playing merrily. You’ve also used an exclamation mark in the right place, to show how excited everyone is about the start of the hunt. Your clear description of your own feelings as you start the hunt is also great and makes it easy for me to put myself in your shoes.
There are a couple of sentences that are missing full stops so next time remember to read back through your work carefully and think about where the sentence boundaries are.
Well done once again Zoe and I hope I get to read your work again in the future.
Occasionally you forget full stops, but your writing sets a movie in my head it feels like it is happening right in front of me. But if the sun was shining brightly then the moon wouldn’t be out yet. Apart from them it is brilliant!
Zoe, this is a great 100 Word Challenge entry. Your first sentences set the scene for the story perfectly, I can just imagine the children playing merrily. You’ve also used an exclamation mark in the right place, to show how excited everyone is about the start of the hunt. Your clear description of your own feelings as you start the hunt is also great and makes it easy for me to put myself in your shoes.
There are a couple of sentences that are missing full stops so next time remember to read back through your work carefully and think about where the sentence boundaries are.
Well done once again Zoe and I hope I get to read your work again in the future.
Mrs Stones (Team 100WC)