You have used some great adjectives in your story Imogen – ‘beating down,’ ‘eager ears,’ ‘merry crowd,’ they all help to describe the atmosphere at the Easter Egg Hunt. I like that you’ve included the fact there were health and safety rules – very important as you don’t want anyone getting lost or hurt.
I can imagine you must have felt so upset watching the rabbit melt in front of you.
A great story, makes me wonder what would have happened next.
Imogen, I like the emotion in this story a lot! You have put in some great adjectives and adverbs, and your excitement comes right out at me when I read it. Great job!
You have used some great adjectives in your story Imogen – ‘beating down,’ ‘eager ears,’ ‘merry crowd,’ they all help to describe the atmosphere at the Easter Egg Hunt. I like that you’ve included the fact there were health and safety rules – very important as you don’t want anyone getting lost or hurt.
I can imagine you must have felt so upset watching the rabbit melt in front of you.
A great story, makes me wonder what would have happened next.
Imogen, I like the emotion in this story a lot! You have put in some great adjectives and adverbs, and your excitement comes right out at me when I read it. Great job!