Well done Sophie
I really enjoyed reading yours and I it was really funny. I enjoyed every bit of it. However you need to leave a space after your full stops and commas. Otherwise well done!
From Niyusha
This is lovely writing Sophie, and you have used speech punctuation to make it clear when someone is speaking. I also like your use of adventurous vocabulary, like massive and hysterics. Well done!
Hello Sophie. This is a humourous piece of writing. I like your use of the word ‘plunked.’ You have created a funny image for your reader of your brother in the large Easter egg. You have used the prompt well, how disappointing.
Hi Sophie,
This 100wc is brilliant I like how you have used an adverb. I like the puncuation that you used like the speech marks
well done! What did you do? What did you have for you break? I have really enjoyed reading your 100wc and if I can find you another time I might comment on you work.
Keep up your wonderful and wicked writing.
Well Done
Hannah at High Lawn
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Well done Sophie
I really enjoyed reading yours and I it was really funny. I enjoyed every bit of it. However you need to leave a space after your full stops and commas. Otherwise well done!
From Niyusha
This is lovely writing Sophie, and you have used speech punctuation to make it clear when someone is speaking. I also like your use of adventurous vocabulary, like massive and hysterics. Well done!
Ooh, I bet that is a bit of a mess in the pocket! Good job!
Hello Sophie. This is a humourous piece of writing. I like your use of the word ‘plunked.’ You have created a funny image for your reader of your brother in the large Easter egg. You have used the prompt well, how disappointing.
Well done.
Hi Sophie,
This 100wc is brilliant I like how you have used an adverb. I like the puncuation that you used like the speech marks
well done! What did you do? What did you have for you break? I have really enjoyed reading your 100wc and if I can find you another time I might comment on you work.
Keep up your wonderful and wicked writing.
Well Done
Hannah at High Lawn
Come and visit our blog and post some comments on some of my friends go to
http://www.6d.highlawnprimary.net
thanks so much for your positive coomment