Hi Raphael,
You’ve used some great words in that 100wc… For- instance; whined. However you have spelt other: over. Also remember to leave a space after you’re punctuation. Otherwise I found the whole story very mystifying and clever so keep on blogging these amazing stories!
I really enjoyed reading your story. A similar thing happened to me when I was young! I liked your use of speech marks and your use of powerful vocabulary. It made your story interesting to read.
I look forward to reading your next one! Keep up the good work!
That is a very interesting mystery. Will the girl ever find the chocolate bunny? This sounds like a real story. I wonder…..
Hi Raphael,
You’ve used some great words in that 100wc… For- instance; whined. However you have spelt other: over. Also remember to leave a space after you’re punctuation. Otherwise I found the whole story very mystifying and clever so keep on blogging these amazing stories!
Raphael,
I love how you have left us all on a cliff hanger! This sounds like it could be a great story to follow on from.
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Hello Raphael,
I really enjoyed reading your story. A similar thing happened to me when I was young! I liked your use of speech marks and your use of powerful vocabulary. It made your story interesting to read.
I look forward to reading your next one! Keep up the good work!
Mr Malcolm
Team 100WC