Wow Mia its’really good I loved the part were you said The lindor factory because you said witch chocolate factory it was. But you put to many elipses.
Wow! Your adjectives are amazing and I also like your use of using the Lindor Factory as your factory getting robbed by and evil bunny. Keep it up and please do the 100wc next week as it will make you an even better writer.
Emilia
HIGH LAWN PRIMARY, BOLTON. http://www.6d.highlawnprimary.net
Mia I loved the descriptive words you used like “atrocious” and “loathsome”. I could feel the tension building, until his bitter end – good job on the 100WC.
Wow Mia this writing is spectacular you used very good punctuation like ….. , “”, ! and , . Also I liked it how you put splat in full caps to let evryone know that he went SPLAT very hard well done. But I think you shouldn’t put too many fullstops in. http://www.6D.HighLawnPrimary.net
Wow Mia its’really good I loved the part were you said The lindor factory because you said witch chocolate factory it was. But you put to many elipses.
Wow! Your adjectives are amazing and I also like your use of using the Lindor Factory as your factory getting robbed by and evil bunny. Keep it up and please do the 100wc next week as it will make you an even better writer.
Emilia
HIGH LAWN PRIMARY, BOLTON.
http://www.6d.highlawnprimary.net
Mia I loved the descriptive words you used like “atrocious” and “loathsome”. I could feel the tension building, until his bitter end – good job on the 100WC.
Wow Mia this writing is spectacular you used very good punctuation like ….. , “”, ! and , . Also I liked it how you put splat in full caps to let evryone know that he went SPLAT very hard well done. But I think you shouldn’t put too many fullstops in.
http://www.6D.HighLawnPrimary.net