Nice story about the flowers and names but after the question (do you think it was you need a ?)You also have missed out a word which is idea after the word brilliant.Apart fro that it was really good.
Hey Beatrix it’s Sophie
I loved your story but to make it even better you could maby check your punctuation.And also the bit where you said that Daisy had a brilliant doesn’t realy make sense apart from that it was fab.
Hello Beatrix. I really liked the idea of the two girls picking the flowes that matched their names. I also liked the way you used a variety of connectives to start your sentences. Freya and Sophie are right in their comments that you need to have a question mark after “Do you think it was”, so perhaps you could reread your work next time to check that you have used the correct punctuation. Thank you for sharing your story on the 100WC.
Oh no! The poor rabbit. I felt sad at the end of your writing because the girls wouldn’t be able to eat the bunny!
Great idea, Beatrix. your sentence starters are good and you’ve used lots of different beginnings. Check your punctuation and capital letters next time.
Happy Easter!
A good attempt Beatrix! I like the use of the question and the way the sentences were structured. Just check the punctuation next time.
I look forward to reading more from you.
Well done!
Nice story about the flowers and names but after the question (do you think it was you need a ?)You also have missed out a word which is idea after the word brilliant.Apart fro that it was really good.
Hey Beatrix it’s Sophie
I loved your story but to make it even better you could maby check your punctuation.And also the bit where you said that Daisy had a brilliant doesn’t realy make sense apart from that it was fab.
Hello Beatrix. I really liked the idea of the two girls picking the flowes that matched their names. I also liked the way you used a variety of connectives to start your sentences. Freya and Sophie are right in their comments that you need to have a question mark after “Do you think it was”, so perhaps you could reread your work next time to check that you have used the correct punctuation. Thank you for sharing your story on the 100WC.
Oh no! The poor rabbit. I felt sad at the end of your writing because the girls wouldn’t be able to eat the bunny!
Great idea, Beatrix. your sentence starters are good and you’ve used lots of different beginnings. Check your punctuation and capital letters next time.
Happy Easter!
A good attempt Beatrix! I like the use of the question and the way the sentences were structured. Just check the punctuation next time.
I look forward to reading more from you.
Well done!