It is very good you used a few good adjectives however they could be better quality and you could use more connectives. Overall I think it is a good piece of work.
Hello Joseph,
A lovely story, well written. Your use of adjectives is good. A very ‘modern’ style of writing.
Hope to read more of your work. Keep on blogging!
Liz
joseph
I think your work was brilliant especialy some of the words you used
please keep on blogging.
It is very good you used a few good adjectives however they could be better quality and you could use more connectives. Overall I think it is a good piece of work.
Hello Joseph,
A lovely story, well written. Your use of adjectives is good. A very ‘modern’ style of writing.
Hope to read more of your work. Keep on blogging!
Liz