Wow Alexandra thats really good. I like how you turned the original Willy Womka into your own version. It was a really good idea. The only problem is you didn’t put two spaces afrter the full stop quite a few times. But apart from that it was really good.
Hi ally
I think it is really good but mabey don’t copie
the story of willy wonka.
some part of your work did not sense,
but other wize it was really good
Keep on blogging.
Hi Alexandra,
this was a really good blog but like Beatrix mentioned you could have made it a little less like the story of Prince Bondycherry! It was really good and my whole family enjoyed reading it! Also some parts didn’t make sense, otherwise keep up the brilliant bloggings!
Oh no shame the Prince didn’t listen to you! I love Charlie and the Chocolate factory and chocolate, so for me this was the perfect story. I hope you don’t leave your chocolate out in the sun to melt as well Alexandra. Keep up the good work, remember to check you work to make sure it is the best you can do. I look forward to reading more of your entries for the 100WC.
Wow Alexandra thats really good. I like how you turned the original Willy Womka into your own version. It was a really good idea. The only problem is you didn’t put two spaces afrter the full stop quite a few times. But apart from that it was really good.
Hi ally
I think it is really good but mabey don’t copie
the story of willy wonka.
some part of your work did not sense,
but other wize it was really good
Keep on blogging.
Hi Alexandra,
this was a really good blog but like Beatrix mentioned you could have made it a little less like the story of Prince Bondycherry! It was really good and my whole family enjoyed reading it! Also some parts didn’t make sense, otherwise keep up the brilliant bloggings!
Oh no shame the Prince didn’t listen to you! I love Charlie and the Chocolate factory and chocolate, so for me this was the perfect story. I hope you don’t leave your chocolate out in the sun to melt as well Alexandra. Keep up the good work, remember to check you work to make sure it is the best you can do. I look forward to reading more of your entries for the 100WC.
Hey Ally Sophie here
I loved your story so much exept you repeated I had to make but apart from that it was fab.
keep blogging