I really liked the topic you talked about, and I could picture an image in my head of you being so happy when you crossed the finish line! You included a lot of description in the update, and I felt very engaged. Next time you could try and put in some punctuation, as sometimes I got a bit stuck reading. Good luck!!
I really liked the topic you talked about, and I could picture an image in my head of you being so happy when you crossed the finish line! You included a lot of description in the update, and I felt very engaged. Next time you could try and put in some punctuation, as sometimes I got a bit stuck reading. Good luck!!