Wow, that was a really exciting story. Where did you get the inspiration to write this story and where did you find the horse’s name? It should be made into a film! Well done Ida
I really enioyed reading this post and I really liked how you started the story and how you discribed JK for exanple:what he loved and how his favourite horse was. I also liked the way you discribed how people were talking to eachother.I think you can inprove by adding some more commas in to break up some sentences.
I hope you like it it was for a compition 500 word I made it up my self.
Wow, that was a really exciting story. Where did you get the inspiration to write this story and where did you find the horse’s name? It should be made into a film! Well done Ida
I made up the horse name.I liked the sound of it. It should be made into a film because it is really good
and sad and films are sometimes sad.
I agree that this should be made into a film. I really liked all the suspense that you put into it. Good luck with the competition!
Thank for supporting me.
I really enioyed reading this post and I really liked how you started the story and how you discribed JK for exanple:what he loved and how his favourite horse was. I also liked the way you discribed how people were talking to eachother.I think you can inprove by adding some more commas in to break up some sentences.