Armelle, I really love your first sentence. The story was very magical. I was a little confused because Aim was about to be killed by a dragon, but if someone killed the dragon they could marry her. I hope you write more fantasy for these challenges.
Hi Armelle, I think you wrote a really nice piece there. I loved the thought of being fed to a dragon. I thought you could have made the death scene more dramatic and you should have put a capital letter in “China”. However I loved the word “pierced” and I thought you used it correctly! Keep it up I look forward to reading more of your work.
I really liked how you started your story . You immediately set the scene, and then dived straight into it. I loved your description of living things. For example; “vicious dragon”, or “beautiful lady”. You could have made your story a bit longer, because it would have created more tension.
Armelle, I really love your first sentence. The story was very magical. I was a little confused because Aim was about to be killed by a dragon, but if someone killed the dragon they could marry her. I hope you write more fantasy for these challenges.
Armelle, I thought your story was dramatic but i couldnt picture it in my head. Your spelling is good and a good use of commas. You could write more.
Hi Armelle, I think you wrote a really nice piece there. I loved the thought of being fed to a dragon. I thought you could have made the death scene more dramatic and you should have put a capital letter in “China”. However I loved the word “pierced” and I thought you used it correctly! Keep it up I look forward to reading more of your work.
I really liked how you started your story . You immediately set the scene, and then dived straight into it. I loved your description of living things. For example; “vicious dragon”, or “beautiful lady”. You could have made your story a bit longer, because it would have created more tension.