Hello Anna, I enjoyed reading your 100 Word Challenge. I really like the way you have used the prompt and used some dialogue to open your writing. Did you miss out the word “over” after “poured”? This is a great description. You’ve tried to use your commas and speech punctuation too. Well Done. Keep writing!
Hi Anna. You have written in the style of a newspaper very well, including using the passive (This rumour is yet to be found wrong) , which is hard to do. Can you think of some different ways to start your sentences instead of “It”?
Thank you for sharing this piece of writing. I really enjoyed it.
Hello Anna, I enjoyed reading your 100 Word Challenge. I really like the way you have used the prompt and used some dialogue to open your writing. Did you miss out the word “over” after “poured”? This is a great description. You’ve tried to use your commas and speech punctuation too. Well Done. Keep writing!
Hi Anna. You have written in the style of a newspaper very well, including using the passive (This rumour is yet to be found wrong) , which is hard to do. Can you think of some different ways to start your sentences instead of “It”?
Thank you for sharing this piece of writing. I really enjoyed it.
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We really enjoyed it. It was very origanal. Great use of smilies. Well done… Keep writing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! 🙂