Hello, Anna. This is a funny piece! You write with a distinctive voice. I like how you give us a general statement about Hippy not looking like his sister, but then it is like you change your mind with the “OK” and let us in on the secret of his difference. As you write, using commas will help your readers more clearly understand your ideas. Well done!
Hello, Anna. This is a funny piece! You write with a distinctive voice. I like how you give us a general statement about Hippy not looking like his sister, but then it is like you change your mind with the “OK” and let us in on the secret of his difference. As you write, using commas will help your readers more clearly understand your ideas. Well done!