Hi Louis, I really like the pictures and I liked how you used your capital letters but maybe you should not have put so many brackets in but otherwise well done
Well Done! You have used such amazing words such as; constantly, confronted and annihilate! Also you have included brackets which gives the reader much more information about the story. Furthermore you have capitalized letters so that that it emphasises your work. Keep it up. Ross at http://www.6d.highlawnprimary.net
Hi Louis,
this was a really imaginative story line and it worked on so many levels- It was funny, it built up suspense and mostb of all it was so creative and everything else that makes it a great story! The only thing that could have done better is that after a comma, don’t use a capital unless its a name or something that needs sa capital!
What our those square things? I really like your vivid description of how dangrous they our. It’s incredable!
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Hi Louis, I really like the pictures and I liked how you used your capital letters but maybe you should not have put so many brackets in but otherwise well done
Well Done! You have used such amazing words such as; constantly, confronted and annihilate! Also you have included brackets which gives the reader much more information about the story. Furthermore you have capitalized letters so that that it emphasises your work. Keep it up. Ross at http://www.6d.highlawnprimary.net
Hi Louis,
this was a really imaginative story line and it worked on so many levels- It was funny, it built up suspense and mostb of all it was so creative and everything else that makes it a great story! The only thing that could have done better is that after a comma, don’t use a capital unless its a name or something that needs sa capital!
Hello Louis, you creatively put up an interesting story in this 100wc. Well done!