Hi Ella,
Great work here. You always manage to write a good post, you have a good writing style. I like the way you give one main emotion. It really works. Could you explain a bit more about Repticorns. Why didn’t the dad know before Emma-rose was born? To improve I think you could plan out the start a little better. Your piece is easy to understand after your in but the start is a bit abrupt. This may just be because I haven’t read your other chapters. Keep up the good work.
Hi Ella,
Great work here. You always manage to write a good post, you have a good writing style. I like the way you give one main emotion. It really works. Could you explain a bit more about Repticorns. Why didn’t the dad know before Emma-rose was born? To improve I think you could plan out the start a little better. Your piece is easy to understand after your in but the start is a bit abrupt. This may just be because I haven’t read your other chapters. Keep up the good work.