I think this was a fantastic poem, with lots of great detail and description; the poem was really funny, I didn’t see any mistakes- which proves you took your time to make an amazing blog post. Well done!
Wow Jessica! This was incredible. The rhymes really made the piece of writing excellent as it really corresponded to the poem. Is your mum really like that? I have read a poem by Roald Dahl about something like that. Did you get the idea from that? Keep up the good work as I would love to read some more of your blogs!
It was really good, really realistic, but was it suppost to rhyme? It rhymed at the end of line 6 and 8 as well as line 10 and 12, buf it followed the sequence line 2 and 4 along with line 14 and 16 would rhyme, which they didn’t.
Hi Shay, It was all supposed to rhyme, and I wanted to mention not being able to pick the rucsack up. I tried to fit it in, and I’m aware that I made it a bit dodgy.
Hi Jessica, this is a brilliant composition. Punctuation marks are carefully positioned. I guess if you are determined to do so, you could have ensured rhymes and rhythm at the end of each line. For instance, The second verse could read thus:
My suitcase is almost FULL,
“Now what do I need?” I CALL,
Three pairs of leggings, four of jeans(BLUE),
And my large, yellow bouncy BALL!
This gives rhyme in lines 1 and 3 and then, lines 2 and 4. Can you see?
Keep up this great skill. Kudos
I think this was a fantastic poem, with lots of great detail and description; the poem was really funny, I didn’t see any mistakes- which proves you took your time to make an amazing blog post. Well done!
Wow Jessica! This was incredible. The rhymes really made the piece of writing excellent as it really corresponded to the poem. Is your mum really like that? I have read a poem by Roald Dahl about something like that. Did you get the idea from that? Keep up the good work as I would love to read some more of your blogs!
It was really good, really realistic, but was it suppost to rhyme? It rhymed at the end of line 6 and 8 as well as line 10 and 12, buf it followed the sequence line 2 and 4 along with line 14 and 16 would rhyme, which they didn’t.
Hi Shay, It was all supposed to rhyme, and I wanted to mention not being able to pick the rucsack up. I tried to fit it in, and I’m aware that I made it a bit dodgy.
Hi Jessica, this is a brilliant composition. Punctuation marks are carefully positioned. I guess if you are determined to do so, you could have ensured rhymes and rhythm at the end of each line. For instance, The second verse could read thus:
My suitcase is almost FULL,
“Now what do I need?” I CALL,
Three pairs of leggings, four of jeans(BLUE),
And my large, yellow bouncy BALL!
This gives rhyme in lines 1 and 3 and then, lines 2 and 4. Can you see?
Keep up this great skill. Kudos
I really like your work jessica it is really good it explains a lot of this part you have imagend in your head it is a very good sene well done !