Hi Jude, well done for completing the 100 word challenge! What a scary lion! I love the descriptive words you have used (‘stood high and proud’, ‘wildly’, ‘like knives’) they really help the reader (me) to imagine what the lion was like. Remember to read through your sentences to check they make sense and try not to mix up your tenses, for example you said, ‘Tim walked’ then changed to ‘I thought’. Maybe next time you could try to use some adverbs to start your sentences, for examples, ‘Slowly, the lion walked forward’ or ‘ Furiously, the lion roared loudly’. Keep up the great writing, I look forward to reading more.
Jude
I think your work is really good well done!
Hi Jude, well done for completing the 100 word challenge! What a scary lion! I love the descriptive words you have used (‘stood high and proud’, ‘wildly’, ‘like knives’) they really help the reader (me) to imagine what the lion was like. Remember to read through your sentences to check they make sense and try not to mix up your tenses, for example you said, ‘Tim walked’ then changed to ‘I thought’. Maybe next time you could try to use some adverbs to start your sentences, for examples, ‘Slowly, the lion walked forward’ or ‘ Furiously, the lion roared loudly’. Keep up the great writing, I look forward to reading more.
I love your wonderful adjectives and adverbs that you use to describe the lion can I ask you any questions. Did you enjoy writing the 100wc?