I thought this poem was very good. I like the way he described exactly what the waves were doing the whole time. To improve your work I would probaly put in a better ending line. 🙂
Oh, sorry. I can see it now.
Instead of “scaring anyone in sight” could the last line be “The cause of the empty beach.” or “Washing happiness away.”
I agree with Alfie, the line could be changed. 🙁
I thought this poem was very good. I like the way he described exactly what the waves were doing the whole time. To improve your work I would probaly put in a better ending line. 🙂
To Alfie Z
I suppose you are right, although it is a bit hard to end a tanka poem. 🙂
This poem is really good and descriptive. It paints a really good picture.
Is it personification?
Anyway it is really good. 🙂
To Jessica,
yes it was personification.
Oh, sorry. I can see it now.
Instead of “scaring anyone in sight” could the last line be “The cause of the empty beach.” or “Washing happiness away.”
I agree with Alfie, the line could be changed. 🙁
A very vivid description. I liked the part about the waves; it really felt like being there.
Well done!