My Water Tanka – Burst and Flood

One Response to My Water Tanka – Burst and Flood

1. Jessica says:

   February 13, 2012 at 3:24 pm

   This poem is really good and paints a picture.
   Two bad things though…
   1. Line no.4 has 8 syllables.
   2. Line no.5 could be better. The last line is always hard!
   The poem reminds me of slipping on some ice and nearly falling in a river a few years ago!
   Well done 😉

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