Hi Laila. This was a good piece of persuasive writing. You made a strong statement at the beginning and followed it up straight away with an example. Your spelling was also very good so I can see that this challenge really is helping you to improve.
Try reading this aloud now, only pausing for breath at full stops. Can you see how out of breath you are at the end of the second sentence because it is so long? Read it again and see if you can turn this into several shorter sentences.
Hi Laila. This was a good piece of persuasive writing. You made a strong statement at the beginning and followed it up straight away with an example. Your spelling was also very good so I can see that this challenge really is helping you to improve.
Try reading this aloud now, only pausing for breath at full stops. Can you see how out of breath you are at the end of the second sentence because it is so long? Read it again and see if you can turn this into several shorter sentences.
Thank you sharing your success story!
Hi Laila. you are a really good writer. I like this price of writting.