Hi Grace – ooh, this is a well-written and very mysterious 100wc that I thoroughly enjoyed reading! You’ve used some lovely language to really bring the description alive. One thing to think about is perhaps thinking about trying not to repeat sentence structures to closely to each other (eg, the ‘well,’ sentences!) – using the same technique twice in succession makes it lose a little bit of its effect on the reader.
Wow grace. That was really good. I see you’ve got a comment from the 100 word challenge team. Well done! what inspired you to write this? Have you been in that kind of situation before?
Hi Louis,
Thank you for your comment. I have been reading a book called the valley of secrets and it encludes a spooky, empty house so I suppose I got it from that. And I have been in the sistuation before, when my peice won the 100 world challenge. However not recently so it was nice of Mr Yenyon to read it. Have you ever been to a ruined house or castle. The mansion in my story reminds me of Ludlow castle. It has a real atmousphere. Anyway thanks.
Hi Grace – ooh, this is a well-written and very mysterious 100wc that I thoroughly enjoyed reading! You’ve used some lovely language to really bring the description alive. One thing to think about is perhaps thinking about trying not to repeat sentence structures to closely to each other (eg, the ‘well,’ sentences!) – using the same technique twice in succession makes it lose a little bit of its effect on the reader.
You should be really proud of this 100wc – it’s fantastic! I can’t wait to read more of your work on the 100wc!
Mr K 🙂
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Wow grace. That was really good. I see you’ve got a comment from the 100 word challenge team. Well done! what inspired you to write this? Have you been in that kind of situation before?
Hi Louis,
Thank you for your comment. I have been reading a book called the valley of secrets and it encludes a spooky, empty house so I suppose I got it from that. And I have been in the sistuation before, when my peice won the 100 world challenge. However not recently so it was nice of Mr Yenyon to read it. Have you ever been to a ruined house or castle. The mansion in my story reminds me of Ludlow castle. It has a real atmousphere. Anyway thanks.