a terrible accident

Posted on July 2, 2012 by Deleted User
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One Response to a terrible accident

  1. Rafi says:
    July 3, 2012 at 6:03 pm

    Hi Jesse,
    I thought your work was very good because:
    1. You used some good adjectives.
    2. Your story line was very good.

    However, in your next blog remember to…
    1. Use full stops.
    2. Check your spelling.
    3. Start a new line if someone new is speaking.

    Keep up the very good work.

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