unexpecded poem by zoe

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  1. Claire says:

    Zoe, I really like this poem. I can feel the tension and your fear when Milo is in the water, even without you actually describing the fear. This is a very grown-up way of writing. When you write that your throat is sore, we understand that you have been shouting and in panic. The vocabularly is well chosen, “swans flapping ferociously”, I can imaging the scene. Well done! Keep up the writing.

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