Hi Alfie, there are a few silly mistakes I spotted in your post, which I would expect you to know how to correct, and I couldn’t really understand it. Thanks for using my name in the post, were you basing it on me, or was it one fo the others. Nice story anyway. Try and perfect your punctuation a bit more, description is also what we would like to see. You don’t always need to add dialogue to every line! You have a few mispelt words as well, such as ‘Nothings’, as that is not a word. You should have written ‘Nothing is’ so that it made more sense.
You put your punctuation in the rite place GOOD!!!
You did a lot GOOD!!!
WELL DONE !!!
Hi Alfie, there are a few silly mistakes I spotted in your post, which I would expect you to know how to correct, and I couldn’t really understand it. Thanks for using my name in the post, were you basing it on me, or was it one fo the others. Nice story anyway. Try and perfect your punctuation a bit more, description is also what we would like to see. You don’t always need to add dialogue to every line! You have a few mispelt words as well, such as ‘Nothings’, as that is not a word. You should have written ‘Nothing is’ so that it made more sense.