Hi charlie I thought your poem was very intresting because i liked it when you said the aliens were scary alright but the zombies put up much more of a fight and you forgot to put in an r when you wrote your.
Wow Charlie!
I love all the dramatic weather and actions that are going on-the rhyming is really good, I also really like the way you shorten words, e.g ‘ C’rrupt’.
You forgot a few capital letters, at the beggining of scentences and ‘I’s.
Overall a great peice of writing.
Isabella
Hi Charlie,
I thought yours was very unusal ,the way that the zombies ate your flesh, I thought that was very funny.
try to make it more intresting and more descriptive.
Hi Charlie
I liked your poem. I thought it was very imagnitive and I could picture it so well like I was their.
Capital letters start of poems and your ‘I’s’.
Cant wait to here your other poems
Hi Charlie
I thought this was very funny and imaginative to.
BenP
Hi
I thought it was really good . It was also funny
Hi Charlie
I like your poem and the rhyming was very good also it was funny
Hi charlie
Great poem but I think you could of added a bit more puncuation
Alexander
Hi Charlie
I liked your writing it was realy imaginative and rather spooky but I liked it alot.
Eve
Hi charlie I thought your poem was very intresting because i liked it when you said the aliens were scary alright but the zombies put up much more of a fight and you forgot to put in an r when you wrote your.
Wow Charlie!
I love all the dramatic weather and actions that are going on-the rhyming is really good, I also really like the way you shorten words, e.g ‘ C’rrupt’.
You forgot a few capital letters, at the beggining of scentences and ‘I’s.
Overall a great peice of writing.
Isabella
hi charlie,
This peice of writing is amazing your ryming and originality are really good but on the last line you forgot to put a capital I.
Hi Charlie,
I thought yours was very unusal ,the way that the zombies ate your flesh, I thought that was very funny.
try to make it more intresting and more descriptive.
Hi Charlie
That was so funny and original it is just so you!
Hey Gabriella
I said I would comment on yours but I couldn’t find it :0
please tell me where to find it so I can comment
Charlie 🙂
Hi Charlie
I liked your poem. I thought it was very imagnitive and I could picture it so well like I was their.
Capital letters start of poems and your ‘I’s’.
Cant wait to here your other poems
Hi Charlie,
I really like your story/poem and it was very descriptive, although “dont” needs to become “don’t”.
I thought that was a very good piece of work but it could of used a bit more punctuation.
Brian Jr