hi Louis I like your post because you have used shrieked instead of said, however you need to remember to put spaces between the full stop and the start of the sectences. Why were you going on the computer? and you could describe how you were walking up the stairs for next time.
Rosie
Hi Louis
Great story but you could add a bit more desription
hi Louis I like your post because you have used shrieked instead of said, however you need to remember to put spaces between the full stop and the start of the sectences. Why were you going on the computer? and you could describe how you were walking up the stairs for next time.
Rosie
Hi Louis that was quite good but I think you should do discription in your story.
Hi Louis H
I like how you described the said and why is there 75 brothers and 75 computers?
Julius
Hi Louis H good story but next time maybe a bit more decription
Hi Louis
I wish I had 75 computers but not 75 brothers
really good.
Hi Louis
If you know what it is like to have one brother, I wonder what it would be like if you had 75 brothers?