Dilan I was hooked into reading it was a great story and so realistic! the only thing that could of made it a bit better was if you put a couple more words in so it would make more sense. But overall it was an amazing story and I loved it!
Hi Dilan,
Thank you very much for entering the 100 Word Challenge this week. Your cousin certainly did cause some trouble in your story by playing with the temperature wheel. What was your Dad wearing that made him warm? I think you missed a word there and I’m really interested to know what it was.
Keep writing.
Mrs Stones http://bradfordschools.net/blog/miriamlord100wc/
Dilan I was hooked into reading it was a great story and so realistic! the only thing that could of made it a bit better was if you put a couple more words in so it would make more sense. But overall it was an amazing story and I loved it!
Hi Dilan,
Thank you very much for entering the 100 Word Challenge this week. Your cousin certainly did cause some trouble in your story by playing with the temperature wheel. What was your Dad wearing that made him warm? I think you missed a word there and I’m really interested to know what it was.
Keep writing.
Mrs Stones
http://bradfordschools.net/blog/miriamlord100wc/